The Hammer Mage of Spinworld (A LitRPG Portal Fantasy Deckbuilder)

I have some bad news. This story is good, but not great. It needs a rewrite.

Every time I start a new project, I try to do something better than last time. This time I focused on characterization. I feel like I did a better job bringing James, Lily, Yang, and Gus to life. But I left out the most important character. Max.

Max is a blank slate in this story. That can be good, some people really like self-insert stories. It was not my intention though, and I feel like this story is really lacking a major component. Max needs a personality, interpersonal connections, a better goal than just seeing his brother again, and interesting flaws.

In addition to that, almost all the evolution quests ended up at the end of the book and they should have been spread out throughout the book, to make the final skill merge more satisfying.

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Fixing everything will require a major rewrite. Every decision that the better Max would make would be different and that would mean I would have to basically start over from scratch.

I'm sorry to say, I'm not going to do that right now, if ever. Of all my stories I have written, this one is the least popular. I am going to write something else for a while. Hopefully it's one that people (particularly me) will like better.

I will be working on 9 to 5 Monster Hunter from here on out. It will probably be a while before I start posting it here, I'm going to make sure I don't make the same mistakes for this story.

I'll post all the chapters I have already written tomorrow. It's the final arc of the story and an ending that needs work.