Space Marine in Star Wars

Hello you beautiful souls. A new chappy is coming in the morning (1/2/25), but i also posted the first chapter of another book ive had in the works for a while. It's a little over 8000 words long, so id appreciate if you would go give it a read and tell me your thoughts. Please please please give me constructive criticisms on it, as id love to improve it even more.

Thanks, i really appreciate it!!!