Chapter 6
Chapter 6 Routines and opinions
“Ok…”
Yan Fu carefully read the name in his hand, and then read it a second and third time, but every time he read it, he seemed to be able to find new highlights from the name.
As she had guessed before, Shen Xin’s shots are better than those of her peers, and the same is true for this manuscript called “The Formula of Love”.
In addition to the excellent storytelling, compared with “The Witch”, it has also been greatly improved in composition, the use of perspective skills is reasonable, the portrayal of the characters is more solid, and more importantly, the story is better than that of the bad street. “Witch” is several grades higher.
Whether it is a novel or a comic, there will be a continuum. The process of completing this process in a novel or comic is relatively simple, because it can have enough space to set up the foreshadowing of the early stage, shape the role, and surprise the readers in the follow-up.
Shorter comics and novels are not the same. It requires the writer to refine the control of “language”.
The “language” of novels is writing. Superb writing style, you can use a few words or even one or two words to replace a paragraph. For comics, “language” is more embodied in “sub-shots.”
Within a fixed number of pages, how to select the sub-shots that best express the story so that readers can understand the author’s intentions determines the level of the cartoonist’s level.
Novices can’t do this, but the name of “Formula Love” is perfect.
Sure enough, you guessed it right… He does have extraordinary strength, and, in the expression of the story, he has also improved a few grades—
An introvert boy has a crush on the same introvert girl.
On a graduation trip, the boys finally gathered the courage to confess to the girls, but because of misunderstandings, they led the story to strange places.
For example, in the early part of the script, there is a paragraph in which the boy finally made an appointment with the girl with the help of his friends. When the hostess was buying a drink, the fountain next to the girl suddenly sprayed water, soaking the hostess’s clothes.
Waiting for the boy to return, only to find that the girl has gone.
He searched everywhere, and finally found the girl in a small wood nearby, but he saw the girl and another boy together. In fact, this “boy” is a female classmate in the class, but she always dresses up as a boy, but the flustered boy didn’t realize this and left silently, so the two people had a misunderstanding.
Next, there are still a few misunderstandings like this. In the end, the boy finally expressed his heart when he returned to school, and the lover finally became a family member.
This manga is relatively smooth in terms of starting, inheriting and turning. If Yan Fu was just an ordinary reader, he would definitely applaud this story, but…
Yan Fu suddenly stood up from his seat.
“Is there any problem?” Shen Xin also stood up.
“Sit down first, and I will pour two cups of coffee.”
After Yan Fu left, Shen Xin glanced at the manuscript on the round table, reflecting on Yan Fu’s thoughts.
Is it past, or not?
The story of this comic is written by himself. Although some “routines” are used, the effect of plot twists and turns should be achieved.
As for the key point “misunderstanding”, it is used in many love comics in the 11th area of the earth, and it is not a new routine…
Just when Shen Xin was thinking about it, Yan Fu walked into the cubicle and handed a cup of coffee to Shen Xin.
“Let’s talk about this manga…” Yan Fu took a sip of coffee, meditated for a moment, and explained, “First of all, the first impression this short manga gave me is that it looks good. It is an excellent love manga. If so. Direct publication, you should be able to achieve good results, perhaps you can directly win the serialization-if your goal is just serialization, then it is completely okay. But I think your goal should be more than that?”
Shen Xin nodded.
has the “comic capsule” this big killer, if the target is only serialization, it would be too violent.
Of course, after the serialization, in terms of plot, storyboard, composition, etc., he can “reference” the comics he has seen before. The results should not be a problem, but he still wants to know what are the shortcomings of his original work.
“I only say three points. First, in the 40-page name, you created three misunderstandings. Although the direction of the story is very interesting, the reader will feel tired after reading it. From beginning to end, the whole This comic has always made readers nervous. There is no buffer. I suggest deleting at least one misunderstanding… If you can replace the two misunderstandings with other plots, the effect may be better. As for the reason for this…the second thing I want to say Point-you have to prepare for the upcoming long comic series.”
“A long comic?” Shen Xin really didn’t expect this question.
“That’s right, you open most of the comics, and they are filled with the word’routines.’ This is the case with the boy manga and the girl manga. Taking love novels as an example, the reason why the story can move forward is nothing more than a new character The joining of the protagonist brings about a series of problems, such as’misunderstanding’ or’love triangle’, and the new character added is usually the protagonist’s childhood sweetheart. The protagonist must be between the “new love” and the “old love” Choices, these are all routines.
“But don’t use too much of these elements in short comics, after all, the serial comics will have to be used repeatedly. If you use too much, then there will be no freshness and you will easily lose readers.”
Shen Xin rubbed his chin when he heard this.
Yan Fu’s words may not be right, but he agrees with at least one thing. In the name on page 40, he did stuff too many things, making the work too bloated, and it seems that he needs to be streamlined.
“What about the third point?” Shen Xin asked puzzled.
“When it comes to the third point, I’m angry.” Yan Fu folded his arms, UU read www.uukanshu.com with a gloomy look, “The readers of Juvenile Manga are boys, so you have to catch their eyeballs, that is, they The curiosity of girls—in other words, this manuscript does not contain the’flesh’ style that you are good at.”
“Untidy clothes, half fruit, and even the fat ci revealed intentionally or unintentionally. These contents are not reflected in the comics. What are you going to rely on to attract people? Misunderstandings or coincidences between the hero and the protagonist? Please, the readers don’t have much patience. You set up the plot. If there is no appealing point, your follow-up serialization will not be popular in the third period.”
“…”
Shen Xin had a black line. Yan Fu said these things that he was embarrassed to say.
“The plot…I think the plot can make up for this.” Shen Xin said seriously.
He must stick to the final bottom line-as little as possible the appearance of unsuitable images for children.
“Ah… the latest news I got, “Dreamer” is about to be revised. Like “NewWorld”, it is also a weekly magazine, and the new blockbuster they plan to launch is Chen Zijiao, whom we met a few days ago. You won’t want to lose to Isn’t he?” Yan Fu said.
Shen Xin nodded, he didn’t want to lose to Wang Wenhong and Chen Zijiao.
“By the way, Chen Zijiao also wants to draw short stories, right?”
“No. “Dreamer” deliberately found a script for him. It is said to be a well-known genius writer in China, tailored for him… If you want a screenwriter, I can also find it for you, but the cost of the manuscript must be divided equally, how about ?” Yan Fu asked.
just kidding! The money received must never be distributed to others.
“Reject! I will improve the new name as soon as possible based on your opinion.” Shen Xin assured Yan Fu.
Yan Fu listened to Shen Xin’s words, and a smile appeared on his face.